Fillable Printable Business letter writing-Cindy Bader
Fillable Printable Business letter writing-Cindy Bader
Business letter writing-Cindy Bader
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Business Letter Writing: Inquiries - Asking for Information
We write an enquiry when we want to ask for more information concerning a product, service or
other information about a product or service that interests us. These letters are often written in
response to an advertisement that we have seen in the paper, a magazine, a commercial on
television when we are interested in purchasing a product, but w ould lik e more information before
making a decision.
Remember to place your or your company's address at the top of the letter (or use your company's
letterhead) followed by the address of the company you are writing to. The date can either be placed
double-spaced down or to the right.
Important Language to Remember
• The Start: Dear Sir or Madam
To Whom It May Concern - (very formal as you do not know the person to whom you are
writing)
• Giving Reference: With reference to your advertisement (ad) in...
Regarding your advertisement (ad) in ...
• Requesting a Catalogue, Brochure, Etc.: After the reference, add a comma and continue -
... , would (Could) you please send me ...
• Requesting Further Information: I would also like to know ...
Could you tell me whether ...
• Signature: Yours faithfully - (very formal as you do not k now the person to who m you are
writing)
An example letter
Kenneth Beare
2520 Visita Avenue
Olympia, WA 98501
Jackson Brothers
3487 23rd Street
New York, NY 12009
September 12, 2000
To Whom It May Concern:
With reference to your advertisement in yesterday's New York Times, could you please send me a
copy of your latest catalog. I would also like to know if it is possible to make purchases online.
Yours faithfully,
(Signature)
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Business Letter Writing Basics
The basics of good business letter wr iting are easy to learn. The following guide provides the phrases
that are usually found in any standard business letter. By using these standard phrases, you can
give a professional tone to your English business letters. These phrases are used as a kind of frame
and introduction to the content of business letters. At the end of this guide, you will find links to
sites that give tips on the difficult part of writing successful business letters –arguing your business
objective.
The Start
Dear
Personnel
Director,
Dear Sir or
Madam
(use if you don't know who you are writing to)
Dear Mr, Mrs,
Miss or Ms
(use if you know who you are writin
g
to, and have
a formal relationship with – VERY IMPORTANT use
Ms for women unless asked to use Mrs or Miss)
Dear Frank
(use if the person is a close business contact or
friend)
The
Reference
With reference
to
your advertisement in the Times, …
your letter of 23
rd
March, …
your phone call today, …
Thank you for
your letter of
March 5
th
.
The Reason
for Writing
I am writin
g
to
enquire about … apologize for … confirm …
Requesting
Could you
possibly … ?
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I would be
grateful if you
could …
Agreeing to
Requests
I would be
delighted to …
Giving Bad
News
Unfortunately
…
I am afraid
that …
Enclosing
Documents
I am enclosin
g
…
Please find
enclosed …
Enclosed you
will find …
Closing
Remarks
Thank you for
your help
Please contact
us again if
we can help in any way.
there are any problems.
you have any questions.
Reference to
Future
Contact
I look forward
to
hearing from you soon.
meeting you next Tuesday.
seeing you next Thursday.
The Finish
Yours
faithfully,
(If you don't know the name of the person you're
writing to)
Yours
sincerely,
(If you know the name of the person you're
writing to)
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Best wishes,
Best regards,
(If the person is a close business contact or
friend)
Here is a sample letter using some of these forms:
Ken's Cheese House
34 Chatley Avenue
Seattle, WA 98765
Tel: (206) 456 8967
Fax: (206) 456 6745
Email: [email protected]
Fred Flintstone
Sales Manager
Cheese Specialists Inc.
456 Rubble Road
Rockville, IL 896756
Dear Mr Flintstone,
With reference to our telephone conversation today, I am writing to confirm your order for:
120 x Cheddar Deluxe Ref. No. 856
Please contact us again if we can help in any way.
Yours sincerely,
Kenneth Beare
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Director of Ken's Cheese House
Business Letters
A business letter is more formal than a personal letter. It should have a margin of at least one inch on all four
edges. It is always written on 8½"x11" unlined stationery. There are six parts to a business letter.
1. The Heading. This contains the return address (usually two or three lines) with the date on the last line.
Sometimes it may be necessary to include a line after the address and before the date for a phone number, fax
number, E-mail address, or something similar.
Often a line is skipped between the address and date. That should always be done if the heading is next to the left
margin. It is not necessary to type the return address if you are using stationery with the return address already
imprinted. Always include the date.
2. The Inside Address. This is the address you are sending your letter to. Make it as complete as possible.
Include titles and names if you know them.
This is always on the left margin. If an 8½" x 11" paper is folded in thirds to fit in a standard 9" business envelope,
the inside address can appear through the window in the envelope.
An inside address also helps the recipient route the letter properly and can help should the envelope be damaged
and the address become unreadable.
Skip a line after the heading before the inside address. Skip another line after the inside address before the
greeting.
3. The Greeting. Also called the salutation. The greeting in a business letter is always formal . It normally begins
with the word "Dear" and always includes the person's last name.
It normally has a title. Use a first name only if the title is unclear--for example, you are writin g to someone named
"Leslie," but do not know whether th e person is male or female.
The greeting in a business letter always ends in a colon. (You know you are in trouble if you get a letter from a
boyfriend or girlfriend and the greeting ends in a colon--it is not going to be friendly.)
4. The Body. The body is written as text. A business letter is never hand written. Depending on the letter style
you choose, paragraphs may be indented. Regardless of format, skip a line between paragraphs.
Skip a line between the greeting and the body. Skip a line between the body and the close.
5. The Complimentary Close. This short, polite cl osing ends with a comma. It is either at the left margin or its
left edge is in the center, depending on the Business Letter Style
that you use. It begins at the same column the
heading does. The block style is becoming more widely used because there is no indenting to bother with i n the
whole letter.
6. The Signature Line. Skip two lines (unless you have unusually wide or narrow lines) and type out the name to
be signed. This customarily includes a middle initial, but does not have to. Women may indicate how they wish to
be addressed by placing Miss, Mrs., Ms. or similar title in parentheses before th eir name.
The signature line may include a second line for a title, if appropriate. Use blue or black ink.
Business letters should not contain postscripts.
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The Seven Cs of Business Letter Writing
Effective letter writing boils down to knowing why you are writing a letter, understanding your reader's needs and
then clearly writing what you need to say. Every letter should be clear, human, helpful and as friendly as the topic
allows. The best letters have a conversational tone and read as if you were talking to your reader. In bri ef then,
discover the Seven-Cs of letter writing. You should be
• Clear
• Concise
• Correct
• Courteous
• Conversational
• Convincing
• Complete
When you write a letter, you are trying to convince someone to act or react in a positive way. Your reader will
respond quickly only if your meaning is crystal clear.
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Put yourself in the reader’s shoe s and write in a friendly and helpful tone. Don't represent your company as one that
cannot make a mistake and must always be right. Try not to reply in the normal bland and defensive way of
organizations—write a sinc ere and helpful letter.
If you are responding to a letter, show you are interested in the reader’ s circumstances. If he or she has mentione d
something personal in the letter, refer to it in your reply. This builds a bridge between you and the reader. Read the
original letter carefully and see if there is something you can put in your letter to show your interest.
Business letter writing checklist
When you write a business letter, use this ch ecklist to remind you of the key principles of effective letter writing.
Keep it Short
• Cut needless words and ne edless information.
• Cut stale phrases and redunda nt statements.
• Cut the first paragraph if it refers to previous correspondence.
• Cut the last paragraph if it asks for future correspondence.
Keep it Simple
• Use familiar words, short sentences and short paragraphs.
• Keep your subject matter as simple as possible.
• Keep related information together.
• Use a conversational style.
Keep it Strong
• Answer the reader's question in the first paragraph.
• Give your answer and then explain why.
• Use concrete words and examples.
• Keep to the subject.
Keep it Sincere
• Answer promptly.
• Be human and as friendly as possible.
• Write as if you were talking to your reader.
Writing a strong opening to your business letter
Your first job in writing any letter is to gain your reader’s attention. It’s an important principle of effective writing to
put the most important information first. Your opening paragraph is both the headline and the lead for the message
that follows in the rest of the letter.
Don’t weigh down the front of your letter with boring repetition of information that your reader already knows. Many
letters fail to start well because they follow the standard paragraph of every busine s s letter. Here are some typical
examples of openings in business letters
• Thank you for your letter of 8th March 1998, which has been passed to me for my attention.
• I refer to previous correspondence in respect of the above and note that to date we have not received your
check for the outstanding arrears.
• I write with reference to our telephone conversation yesterday regarding the above matter.
Starting with a reference to the incoming letter is weak and wastes your reader's time. Most reade rs skip it, looking
to the second and third paragraphs to get the answer to their questions. If you step right into your subject in the
first paragraph, you’ll show your reader you do not intend to waste valuable time. So get rid of any opening
reference to the reader's letter and answer the most important question or give the most relevant information in
your first sentence.
Make your first paragraph do something other than just referring to known information—so plunge straight into your
message and don’t waste your reader’s time. For example, you could
• answer a question
• ask a question
• explain an action taken
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• express pleasure or regret
• give information
As the opening paragraph sets the ton e for your letter, try to avoid using tired phrases that are wordy, give little
information and create a formal and imp ersonal tone. Usi ng the classic business-speak openi ng of Further to...
almost guarantees the rest of the letter will be a typical, long-winded, standard piece of business writing.
These opening phrases are so popular because we don’t have to think of what to write. Watch out for standard
phrases in opening paragraph s. Examples are:
• Further to my recent
• I am writing
• I refer to my letter dated
• I refer to previous correspondence
• I write in reference to
• In respect of the above
• Recent correspondence
• Regarding
• With reference to
• With regards to
So be sure your opening paragra ph sets the right tone for your letter. Be direct and use your words positively so
your reader has a good impression from the beginning of your letter. Decide what is the most impo rtant
information—and put it in the your first paragraph. Don’t be afraid to start your letter strongly.
Putting your reader first
For all writers the most important people are their rea ders. If you keep your readers in mind when you write, it will
help you use the right tone, appropriate language and include the right amount of detail.
What do readers want from writing? They want relevant information, presented in a clear, ea sy-to-understan d style.
They don't want muddled thinking, background info rmation they already know, business-speak and jargon or waffle.
Above all, they want to get the gist of your message in one reading—they don’t want to dig for the meaning through
long sentences and a boring style. So if you always keep your readers in mind, you will have to adapt your style
and content to meet their needs.
Getting a clear picture of your readers before you star t to write helps to focus your writing to get your message
across. The better picture you have of your readers, the better you can direct your writing.
Ask questions to get a clear picture of your readers.
• Who are my readers?
• What do they already know about the subject?
• What do they need to know?
• Will they understand technical terms? (Always write out Associated Student Body—never use ASB)
• What information do they want? (Why should they donate, attend, participate?????)
• What do I want them to do? (THIS is so important—spell it out: “Will you donate four gift certificates to
award the “Most Improved Student” in each class?”)
• What interests or motivates them? (For a business—this may be getting their name out there, or gaining
customers, or appealing to the high school age group, or giving back to the community…)
• What prejudices do they have?
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• What worries or reassures them? (Think about this when writing to teachers—rem ember they have a
concern about their curriculum being interrupted!)
• What will persuade them to my view? (See above and think about how you ca n let them know that what
you are doing is VALUABLE to student learni ng!)
• What other arguments do I need to present?
• How are they likely to react to what I say?
If you imagine yourself in your reader's position, you're more li kely to write a good letter.
Keeping your letter to the point
When you write a business letter, you must try not to waste your reader's time. The first step in any writing task is to
set down your aim. Ask yourself, Wh y am I writing? and What do I want to achieve? The clearer you are in your
own mind about what you want to achieve, the better your letter. These questio ns help you focus on the information
that supports your central aim, and to cut information that's irrelevant. By doing this, you'll find you keep to the
subject and perhaps write a document that is a third shorter than you would otherwise draft.
People read to find out information.
You can write the clearest letter or report, but if it doesn't say
anything worth knowing, it's a useless document. You have to learn to present the most relevant
information for your readers' needs. The n having said what you ne ed to say—stop.
The more specific information you give, the better. You need to be ruthless in cutting out the padding most of us put
into letters. It just wastes readers' time and cloud s your me ssage.
To help you to keep to the point of your letter, you can draw up an outline to plan your letter. Follow these steps:
• Make a list of the topics you want to cover but don't worry about the order.
• Under each topic, list key words, examples, arg uments and facts.
• Review each topic in your outline for relevance to your aim and audience.
• Cut out anything that's not relevant to y our aim or audience.
• Sort the information i nto th e best order for your readers.
The advantage of spending a little time setting out a plan is that it not only helps the reader, it also helps you write.
By breaking down a complex topic into subject areas, you'll find it easier to concentrate on the most relevant
information.
Getting the right tone to your business letter
When you write a business letter, it’s important to use a tone that is friendly but efficient. Readers want to know
there’s someone at the other end of the letter who is taking notice and showing interest in their con ce rn s. T ry to
sound—and be—helpful and friendly.
To do this, write as you would speak and talk on paper. This doesn't mean you should use slang, bad g ra mmar or
poor English, but try to aim for a conversational style and let the reader hear your voice.
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Imagine that your reader is sitting opposite you at your desk or i s on the telephone. You’d be unlikely to say “please
be advised” or “I wish to inform you”; instead you’d be more informal and say, “I’d like to explain” or “Let me
explain” or use other everyday expressi ons.
Here are some ways to change your writing style to a conversational style.
Use Contractions
Using contractions such as it's, doesn't, I'm, you're, we're, they're, isn't, here's, that's, we'll gives a personal
and human feel to your writing.
If there are no contractions in your writing, put some in. You don't have to use contractions at every opportunity.
Sometimes writing do not comes more naturally than don't. When you speak, you probably use a combination of
these styles—try to reflect this in your writing.
Use Personal References
Use words such as I, we, you, your, my, and our in your writing. Don't be afraid to identify yourself—it makes
writing much more readable. This is a useful tri ck to make writing look and sound more like face-to-face talk.
Using I, we and you also helps you to av oid using passive verbs. It makes your style more direct and clear.
So instead of writing:
Our telephone number has changed
write
We’ve had our phone rip ped out by the construction people
Instead of writing:
The goal of the Renaissance program is…
write
Our goal is ...
Using active verbs with perso nal references is a quick and dramatic way to make your writing reada ble and more
direct.
Use Direct Questions
Direct questions are an essential part of the spoken langua ge. Using them gives your writing much more impact
and is a common technique in marketing and advertising material. Marketing people use this technique to put
information across clearly and to give their writing impact.
In much business writing, we hide questions in our writing by using words such as whether to introduce them. Look
for these in your writing and change them into dire ct questions. For example:
Original: We would appreciate your advising u s whether you want to continue this account or transfer it.
Redraft: Do you want to continue your account or transfer it?
Original: Please inform us whether payment against these receipts will be in order.
Redraft: Can we pay against these re ceipts?
Apart from making your style more conversational, direct questions liven up your writing—it’s as though you change
the pitch in your voice. There’s nothing like a direct question to get some reaction from your reade r and to give your
writing impact.
Use active verbs rather than passive verbs
Using active verbs rather than passive verbs is the key to good writing. Why? Because passive verbs are
longwinded, ambiguous, imperso nal and dull. Active verbs make your writing simpler, less fo rmal, clearer and more
precise. Here's an example:
Passive: It was agreed by the committee...
Active: The committee agreed...
Passive: At the last meeting a report was made by the Secretary...
Active: At the last meeting the Secretary reported...
Typical Heading
Action Headings
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Supporting Terra Linda Hi gh
School
Helping students become
successful
We are looking for contributions
Would you like to give gifts that
motivate students to achieve?
Improving academics at TL
Creating excitement about
academic achievement at TL
Headings often fail because they stick too rigidly to the subject matter. The key to writing powerful headings is to
use a strong verb and specific word s. Because each heading has a strong verb, we call the se action headings. You
can also use direct que stions as headings as they have an added impact. For example:
• Why Donate Pizzas to Terra Lind a High School?
• Why Invest Your Money in Terra Linda High’s Renaissance Program?
• Are You Looking for a Place to Give Back to Your Community?
Use simple words rather than complex ones
Many writers have difficulty keeping their message simple and clear. Instead of using everyday words they use
complex or unfamiliar words. Simple, everyday words will help you get your message across. Too often we use
words such as additional, indicate, initiate and proliferate for extra, show, start and spread.
Avoid jargon and technical terms
It’s up to you to judge how much you need to explain your industry jargon and specialist terms by putting yourself in
your readers’ shoes. Don’t overestimate your readers’ understandin g of terms because they may have a hazy idea
of the true definition.
It doesn’t insult the intelligence of your readers to explain terms clearly. Imagine a customer was sitting with you
when you mentioned a technical term and aske d ‘What’s that?’ You would explain in everyday language. Do the
same when you write.
Avoid abbreviations
The most common and irritating form of jargon is overuse of abbreviations. NO “ASB,” you must spell it out:
Associated Student Body, so it would be Associated Student Body President—etc.
Edit wordy phrases
Padding is the enemy of good writing. Unnecessary words and phrase s clutter up sentences and obscure meaning.
By comparison, economy of words is the mark of good writing. You have to learn to make every word count in
technical documents. You must edit ruthlessly, cutting any word. Set yourself a target of cutting 10 to 20 percent of
the words in your document.
Look for wordy phrases such as these in your writing and replace them with a single word or cut them out
completely:
